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In many countries, people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. what are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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Climate
change
Climate
change
 is a global issue, and we must work together to save our world. what is the exact meaning of
this
change
?
Climate
change
 begins with the increasing level of CO2 and
recorded
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 in the1950s in the period of
industrial
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the industrial
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 revolution.
Although
 it is destroying our environment including water,
soil
 ,and air, we cannot overcome it.
This
 rapid
climate
change
 can be caused not only using of sprays , and cars but
also
 by using chemicals to grow the
soil
 in farming.
In addition
, burn of fossil fuels provokes the emission of greenhouse gases - mostly carbon dioxide (CO2). These gases trap the Sun's heat and cause the planet's temperature to rise. The world is now about 1.1C warmer than it was in the 19th Century - and the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere has risen by 50%. Drought and higher temperatures kill the
soil
.
Besides
this
, the tills
also
 destroy the
soil
 where a lot of microorganisms live but chemicals turn it into
a desert areas
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.
This
 process is
also
 called desertification. Unfortunately,
this
 process is going on. The essence of the topic compels us to investigate simple assisting ways .in fact we have to work as a team. When we heal the
soil
, we will
also
 heal our atmosphere. How we can prevent all of these? What are governments doing? Many countries have pledged to get to "net zero" by 2050.
This
 means reducing greenhouse gas emissions as much as possible
,
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 and balancing out remaining emissions by absorbing an equivalent amount from the atmosphere.Experts agree that
this
 is still achievable, but requires governments, businesses and individuals to make substantial changes now. What can individuals do? What will happen if we solve
climate
change
?Humans have caused major
climate
 changes to happen already, and we have set in motion more changes still.
However
, if we stopped emitting greenhouse gases today, the rise in global temperatures would begin to flatten within a few years.
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