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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the near
future
, robotic cars will be available
instead
 of human-controlled vehicles. I believe that it is more likely to have some positive effects rather than drawbacks, which I will demonstrate in the following paragraph. First and foremost, these vehicles are environmentally friendly. Typical cars that emitted fossil fuels will take off the roads.
Therefore
, not only we do have clean and fresh air, but
also
 our planet will be preserved.
Moreover
, there are no issues with
a
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car
accidentcar
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accident can
 accidents and
it is clear that
,
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car
 crashes are created by human errors,
thus
, statistics of deaths and road incidents will reduce dramatically. What is more, people who have disorder abilities feel more satisfied
due to
 travelling without any limitations.
For example
, some elderly living on their own is able to commute independently.
However
,
driverless
 cars will have some disadvantages,
for instance
, many truck driving jobs could be lost through the robotic
car
.
Also
, the initial costs of automated vehicles are noticeable, some experts estimate it might cost a huge amount of cash for a full vehicle that drives itself. In conclusion, the
driverless
car
 plays an integral part in
todays
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 and
future
 modern society. Not only protect the environment
,
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 but
also
 lead to secure human lives. In conclusion, the
driverless
car
 plays an integral part in
todays
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 and
future
 modern society. Not only protect the environment
,
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 but
also
 lead to secure human lives. In conclusion, the
driverless
car
 plays an integral part in
todays
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future
 modern society. Not only protect the environment
,
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 but
also
 lead to secure human lives.
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