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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
There is a certain category of professions (doctors, engineers), which arise a vital question: should
such
 professionals work only in a
country
, where they were given the education? It’s quite a neat question, which in my opinion cannot be so simply answered. In modern
realities
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 it’s hard to imagine, that a person could be required to work in one
country
 without
a
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the
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 possibility to change his
place
 of living. In an ace of
internet
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the internet
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 and high-advanced
technologies
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such
 a statement feels outdated and sounds like slavery. Today you have to be flexible and adapt to the rapid changes in order to keep your
place
. And it can be applicable to any profession.
On the other hand
, those professionals have quite a narrow
specter
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 of knowledge, usually connected to the
place
 of living and learning. That means
,
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apply
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 a person has to study again to be a certificate
profession
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professional
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 in another
country
, especially in a distant
country
 with a completely different culture, climate and language. In my opinion, a person has to have a right to live and work in any county that he or she
prefer
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. All the borders and artificial limitations captivate us in our own small worlds. They just separate us and do not make our realm a better
place
. In order to evolve and be equal humanity has to be more open and
unite
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. In the end, professionals have to decide by themselves what exactly
do
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apply
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they want. Changing a
country
 is not so easy, especially for people with
such
a
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apply
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narrow and
place oriented
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place-oriented
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 professions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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