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interact with each other has changed because of Technology. In what ways has Technology affected personal relationship? Has become a positive or negative development?

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 has become the most popular in the twentieth century. Community nowadays spend most of their time on their electronic devices and
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 has had a huge impact on their relationships. The effects of
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 on an individual's connections are not only apparent during their childhood but
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 continue in adulthood. I believe that
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 effects are both positive and negative. To start with, learning techniques have changed significantly
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 the emergence of the internet. Today many schools offer online courses at lower prices and flexible hours. by attending
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 classes children has a lower chance to meet new classmates and find new mates. They
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 do not have enough time to talk with their tutors and share their ideas with them.
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, communication applications are widely used among teenagers all over the world
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 as dating apps. Youngsters find their soulmates on the internet and they chat on social media
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 of hanging out in the real world. All in all, most relations are virtual because of
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. Personally speaking, I think the Internet and mobile phones have a negative impact on relationships.
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 it is thought that these technologies make connections easier, online buddies are not real friends whom you can rely on them in real situations.
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, people who are daily users of
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 will learn communication skills needed to interact with people virtually, not actually.
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, technological advances have changed the way communities interact in different periods of their life and I consider
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 as a negative impact since they spend less time together in the real world.
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