Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?

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It is common knowledge that completing
education
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through formal
school
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plays a vital role
behind
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the success of someone. Yet, recently there are some cases where someone who
complete
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their studies
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a lower success rate when compared to pupils who leave their
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relatively earlier. Recognizing
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phenomenon, the author
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that
school
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is not the only variable behind the
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of people. The following paragraphs will support several arguments
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stand. To have a better understanding of
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context, Bill Gates, the founder of one of the greatest technology on earth, could
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into account as an example. He did not finish his formal
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, yet he registered himself in the list of richest guys in the world.
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, Mark
Zurkeberg
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Zuckerberg
, the founder of Facebook
that
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had not
able
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in gaining a formal degree since leaving
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before its timeline. Despite
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his failure in formal
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, he is able to be a human being that
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great
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a great
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impact
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the global society
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his invention. Gates and
Zurkeberg
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Zuckerberg
are the only two
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of numerous people that have not a formal degree but
still
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are still
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able to record
theirself
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their self
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persons. Prior studies mentioned that
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formal
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, ethical
work
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is another important variable to help someone
to
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reach
its
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his
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dream. Even though Gates and
Zurkeberg
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Zuckerberg
were unsuccess in their formal
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,
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apply
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both individuals have good ethical
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which
make
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them more valuable than others. Persistent and highly motivated are sort of examples of ethical
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.
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to
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and highly motivated, discovering our passion will
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assist us to have
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attitude
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. To summarize, we cannot ignore that
education
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is
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an important variable to help people in pursuing
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or
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their
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dream. Yet, it is not the come first variable.
Education
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should be complementary
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having excellency in ethical
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.
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, having both variables in our life would mobile us to reach success easier.
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