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Some people believe that the internet has positive effect , others think that It has negative trends .Discuss both views and give your opinion .

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One school of thought holds that the Internet could bring a plethora of benefits for users, others believe that it could be harmful.
This
 essay attempts to shed light on both the merits and demerits of
this
 tendency before concluding that I am in
favor
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 of the former notion. On the one hand, social networking sites could be disadvantageous to a certain extent.
Firstly
, these websites could lead to numerous false reports.
This
 is because authorities could not control the quality of all news on these applications, thereby leading to misunderstandings among citizens, or even rioters could spread false information that affects people's quality of life.
Secondly
,
this
 tendency could bring a myriad of drawbacks for teenagers. Specifically, adolescents who lack life experiences could be drawn into social evils and
then
 become a financial burden for their family or even their community.
On the other hand
, there are a host of compelling reasons as to why I am convinced that the Internet could offer inhabitants many positive effects. One key rationale in favour of
this
 view is that it could help people, especially students, broaden their horizons.
This
 perspective could be
further
 by the fact that, through social media, residents could have a great chance of being exposed to new cultures and understanding clearly about historical events
as well as
 indigenous practices in other countries, which could help them enrich their knowledge. Another justification is that people could easily sell their goods or purchase categories for themselves.
For instance
, thanks to various e-commerce sites
such
 as Shopee, users could save time buying new products since they could do that in their accommodation
instead
 of going outside. Thereby, individuals could spend more time taking care of their family and themselves. In conclusion,
while
 it is irrefutable that the Internet could have some downsides, I would contend that it could bring a myriad of benefits for humans.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, which is great. However, try to add more varied sentence types to make your writing even more engaging.
task achievement
You have presented clear, comprehensive ideas and provided relevant examples. This is very good. Just ensure that every point you make directly links back to the main topic to maintain maximum relevance.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both strong and provide a clear framework for your essay.
task achievement
You have solid supporting examples that effectively illustrate your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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