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The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The utilization of social media in our world has made communication around the globe easier and has taken place over physical communication.
This
 influences the public positively and negatively.I agree that the merits of technological arts surpass the demerits
To begin
 with, inter-networking around the globe has become faster and easier.Individuals around the world can communicate even when they travel.
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, they will write a letter and send it to them through the post which takes about a month for individuals to receive it in the absence of the
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. Most people do business online and chat with their partners through the internet.
In addition
, technological modules have created many apps through which people can learn in the comfort of their homes and get certificates online.
Similarly
, during the
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 pandemic, education sessions were held online which was very beneficial
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 courses.
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, I studied care management online affiliated with Florence
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 in the UK without necessarily travelling.
However
, there can be instances where there will be network disconnections in which communication can be interrupted.
For instance
, when a corporate organization involving people in different countries decides to hold a meeting online and unsudden
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 that the network fails the meeting will be unsuccessful.
Also
, it causes distraction.Some students might overlook the benefits of using the internet for research and rather watch unnecessary videos which will not help In conclusion,inter-networking around the continent is faster and easier.
Conversely
, the network might be disconnected in some instances.But I am of the view that social media has brought many changes which have affected the world positively.
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