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some people think that it is more bebeficial to take part in sports which are playedin teams like football. but other think taking part in individual sports are better, like swimming. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people are of the view that taking part in
team
sports
 is good ,but some suggest that individual games like swimming
is
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 much better than that.Both these play activities are good in
one
 way or the other .
This
 essay will discuss both views
along with
 my opinion in the conclusion. To commence with,
sports
 like food ball and cricket are completely based on teamwork.A single
person
 cannot take the
team
 to
a
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victory.If we are considering cricket,two people are needed on the ground till the end.So if a
team
 starts losing wickets ,only
one
person
 cannot take the
team
 to victory .If football is considered,there is
also
 a combination of work needed, from the player side
as well as
 from the goalkeeper side.If
one
person
 is continuously taking goals but the keeper is allowing goals of the opposite
team
, there is no sense in playing like that.So mutual coordination is important in these types of
sports
.If a
person
 is out of form or is having an injury it can affect the performance of the whole
team
.
On the contrary
,individual
sports
 have their own merits.It is completely a
one
-man show.So
one
 can practice and plan
according to
 their own time and wish.They need to listen to other people.They can plan and execute by themselves without anybody"s interference which is pretty much easier when compared to others
sports
 which are played in groups.A swimmer can practice at whatever time he needs.They are their own masters .
To conclude
,both single and group
sports
 events have their own importance, but
i
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 personally support group
sports
 ,as it will help us to adjust to various situations and surroundings and develop some good patience which can
further
 help them in their daily life.
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