you live near a public school. the school has asked local residents to help with the maintenance of school buildings and play area. Write a letter to the principal. in your letter, -explain why you would like to help -tell them how you can help -let them know when you are available

#school #residents #maintenance #buildings #area #-explain #-tell #-let

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to respond to your request that you are looking for an inhabitant who can protect the school and its infrastructure. The reason why I am so interested in supporting the preservation of college is that my children are studying there and they are all satisfied with the quality of education.

Moreover

,it produces future doctors,teachers and engineers.

That is

why I would like to shoulder

this

responsibility. I have a construction company

that is

called Pasha.I suggest that I can reconstruct the parts of the college which are needed to be repaired.I will do it reasonably

price

Correct your spelling

priced

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Furthermore

,the materials which will be used for school will be free. Recently,I have been overburdened,

therefore

,I hardly find time to come back home,

however

,the project is about to be completed.If we do not confront any problems,we will finish next month.After ,that I will be free to discuss it with you. I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Malik Maliki.

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task response

The letter addresses the main points but lacks specificity and detail in some areas. More specific examples and details would improve task response.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of the letter is generally clear, but the greeting and closing could be more formal and appropriate for a letter to the principal of a school.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

159 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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