The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost).

The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost).
The flow chart illustrates a process of creating garden fertilizer from recycled organic rubbish. A glance at the diagram shows that there are 5 parts, starting with providing a
container
and resulting
a
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compost as the end.
According to
the figure, putting water inside a plastic
container
,
that
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has been provided before is the first step.
While
the
container
is fulfilled
by
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some water, a number of waste is added.
This
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stage, pay attention that all of
that is
organic
such
as newspaper, grass, or food.
In addition
, manage the volume of waste probably 15 cm for every layer. When it is done, nitrogen and hot water are mixed
together with
all material inside.
Moreover
, before leaving it for a long time, do not forget to close the
container
in order to that there is no
any
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material can enter including air.
Subsequent
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stage is to wait for approximately 6 months where in
this
stage the process of heating involves.
Finally
, the compost
are
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produced and get ready to
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utilize
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be utlize
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utlize
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utilised
in
garden
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,
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