Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries. But increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?
It is argued that increasing
average
lifespan causes some influences Correct article usage
the average
to
elderly Change preposition
on
people
and society. For this
phenomenon, I suppose that youth people
become to take more numerous burdens for aging
Change the spelling
ageing
people
, and the number
of elderly who are unable to live with healthy body
and Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
mind
would Fix the agreement mistake
minds
be rise
because of Change the verb form
rise
aging
.
Change the spelling
ageing
Firstly
, the amount of tax would reap due to
older individuals’ pensions and medical supports, such
as medicines costs and medical facilities, and as a result
, citizens, especially yonger
Correct your spelling
younger
people
should pay taxes more and this
situation affect
Change the verb form
affects
youngers’
living costs directly. In Japan, Correct your spelling
younger’
for example
, young people
spend a
Correct article usage
apply
one third
of their wages Add a hyphen
one-third
to
paying Change preposition
on
tax
because of Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
incling
the Correct your spelling
including
number
of older people
, and some of the youth people
are unevitable
to save their money more strictly.
Correct your spelling
inevitable
Secondly
, some number of
elder Correct quantifier usage
apply
persons
have to face the situation in which they have to live even though they do not desire to live anymore because of their disabilities, Replace the word
people
such
as being unable to move easily
than before. In almost all Correct quantifier usage
more easily
the
countries, it is not allowed to suicide or help to suicide whether they are younger Correct article usage
apply
nor
older. Correct word choice
or
However
, there are some people
who are older and have
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apply
an
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a
complain
Wrong verb form
complained
about
that they cannot live actively. Change preposition
apply
As a consequence
, many old individuals suffer from thinking the
meaning of their existence, and the average level of Change preposition
about the
wealness
would decrease.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
weakness
wellness
rising
the average Correct your spelling
raising
of
Change preposition
apply
the
life expectancy would generate Correct article usage
apply
the
poverty Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
for
enormous
Change the article
an enormous
the enormous
number
of young people
resulted
Wrong verb form
resulting
by
the Change preposition
from
climing
tax Correct your spelling
climbing
amunt
, and Correct your spelling
amount
then
, lead to the unhappy
of older Replace the word
unhappiness
people
, who are disappointed by their disabilities generated by aging
.Change the spelling
ageing
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