Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries. But increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?

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lifespan causes some influences

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elderly

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and society. For

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phenomenon, I suppose that youth

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become to take more numerous burdens for

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people

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, and the

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of elderly who are unable to live with healthy

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because of

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, the amount of tax would reap

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older individuals’ pensions and medical supports,

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as medicines costs and medical facilities, and

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, citizens, especially

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should pay taxes more and

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living costs directly. In Japan,

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, young

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spend

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one third

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of their wages

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paying

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including

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of older

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, and some of the youth

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are

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have to face the situation in which they have to live even though they do not desire to live anymore because of their disabilities,

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as being unable to move

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than before. In almost all

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countries, it is not allowed to suicide or help to suicide whether they are younger

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older.

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, there are some

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who are older and

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about

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that they cannot live actively.

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, many old individuals suffer from thinking

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meaning of their existence, and the average level of

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weakness

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would decrease. In conclusion,

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raising

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the average

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the

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life expectancy would generate

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poverty

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of young

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climbing

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amount

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, lead to the

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of older

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, who are disappointed by their disabilities generated by

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries. But increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?

Your opinion

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?