Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries. But increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?

It is argued that increasing
average
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lifespan causes some influences
to
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on
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elderly
people
and society. For
this
phenomenon, I suppose that youth
people
become to take more numerous burdens for
aging
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ageing
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people
, and the
number
of elderly who are unable to live with healthy
body
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bodies
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and
mind
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minds
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would
be rise
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rise
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because of
aging
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ageing
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.
Firstly
, the amount of tax would reap
due to
older individuals’ pensions and medical supports,
such
as medicines costs and medical facilities, and
as a result
, citizens, especially
yonger
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younger
people
should pay taxes more and
this
situation
affect
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affects
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youngers’
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younger’
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living costs directly. In Japan,
for example
, young
people
spend
a
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one third
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of their wages
to
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on
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paying
tax
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taxes
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because of
incling
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including
the
number
of older
people
, and some of the youth
people
are
unevitable
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inevitable
to save their money more strictly.
Secondly
, some
number of
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apply
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elder
persons
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people
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have to face the situation in which they have to live even though they do not desire to live anymore because of their disabilities,
such
as being unable to move
easily
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more easily
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than before. In almost all
the
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countries, it is not allowed to suicide or help to suicide whether they are younger
nor
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or
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older.
However
, there are some
people
who are older and
have
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an
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a
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complain
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complained
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about
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that they cannot live actively.
As a consequence
, many old individuals suffer from thinking
the
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about the
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meaning of their existence, and the average level of
wealness
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weakness
wellness
would decrease. In conclusion,
rising
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raising
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the average
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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life expectancy would generate
the
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poverty
of
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for
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enormous
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an enormous
the enormous
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number
of young
people
resulted
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resulting
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by
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from
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the
climing
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climbing
tax
amunt
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amount
, and
then
, lead to the
unhappy
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unhappiness
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of older
people
, who are disappointed by their disabilities generated by
aging
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ageing
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.
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