A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday gor the first time this summer. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you think your friend will enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Sara, Hope you’re doing well. It was great to receive your mail recently. I’m so happy that you’ve decided to go on a camping trip in August. I’m sure you’ll enjoy
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holiday because it’ll be a great opportunity to feel the nature.
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, I can remember that since our childhood you’ve always been interested in stars, so you can just lie on the grass and watch the stars and their movements all
over night
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.
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, camping can
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have some downsides. If the weather gets cold and rainy, you probably must stay in the tent to avoid getting wet. Above that, in some camping
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the risk of facing poisonous insects
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spider
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and
snake
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is extremely high.
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I’d really like to join you on
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holiday, I’ve already made plans with my siblings, and we’re going to Rome for my cousin’s wedding that will be held in the
Armany
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Armani
Hotel
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of the summer.
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, I hope we can make another plan together for the New Year’s holiday. I’m looking forward to hearing more from you after you return home, All the best Ahmad

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coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured, but ensure that each paragraph maintains a consistent focus on one main idea to improve clarity further. For example, the disadvantages could be more clearly outlined in a separate paragraph.
task achievement
While the tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend, consider using more varied vocabulary to enhance expressiveness and engagement throughout.
positive
The letter has a warm and engaging tone, which is perfect for communicating with a friend.
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You provided personal touches, like referencing your friend's interest in stars, which makes the letter more relatable.
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