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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the number of voyagers on the Caribbean islands, either who stayed on the ships or on the
island
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, annually over a 7-year period.
Overall
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, throughout seven years, visitants had been attracted to visit the Caribbean
island
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 as could be seen from the graph that showed a massive increase in the total amount of guests.
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, there were some moments in a year when the passengers tend to either stay on the cruise or on the
island
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. In 2010, visitors would likely go out and stay on the
island
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 rather than live inside the ships,
while
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 in 2006,
this
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 trend shows the opposite way
showed
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shown
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 by
the
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a
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 decreasing number of nearly half a million visitants
,
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 before it started to rise again in 2007. Meanwhile, the interest of
crowd
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the crowd
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 staying on the cruise significantly rose until it reached up to 2 million visitors by the end of 2017.
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, in 2012, it shows the receding amount of people who hang on inside the cruise as people tend to have some fresh air outside the
island
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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