The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart represents the types of careers that Anthropology graduates from one university did after they graduated. The table displays the wages after five years of working in
this
particular field.
Overall
,
it is clear that
over half of them had chosen full-time
work
while
having part-time
work
along with
a master’s degree was the least selected option.
Furthermore
, the types of employment that received the highest income (over $75,000) were freelance consultants and the government sector.
According to
the chart, full-time
work
had the highest contribution for 52%
while
there
was
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only 5% of students who decided to
work
a part-time job and study postgrad. The part-time job was the second most popular option close to the unemployed for 15% and 12% respectively. Freelance consultants and the government sector had a similar pattern of income proportions which were 5% of $25,000-$49,999 and 15% of $50,000-$74,999.
Additionally
, 80% of both
also
had income over $75,000. Private companies had
a
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different characteristics, the highest percentage of salaries belonged to $50,000-$74,999 for 35% and the least was 10% to $25,000-$49,999.
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