Some feel that individuals should try to assimilate completely to the country where they live while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Some individuals argue that those ought to embrace the tradition of the country where they are living.Whilst,others feel that it is crucial to protect their own
culture
.I would argue that assimilation of any nation's beliefs is vitally important as well
as
they should keep alive their native Correct word choice
and
culture
.
On the one hand,it is undeniable that in order to adapt new country and its citizens each immigrant should follow their traditional activities
such
as attending festivals and celebrating their holidays.This
is because you show respect to their valuable religion and history,by doing this
those living abroad may facilitate their adaptation process.For example
,millions of tourists visit Turkey each year.Some of them are interested in joining in local activities
in order to celebrate their holidays together and paved
the way to get to know new people even a few tourists got married to Turkish men or women.Wrong verb form
pave
That is
why the best way for being
able to mix with local people is to embrace their traditions.
Change preposition
to be
On the other hand
,everyone must protect their values like cuisine,holidays and so on for the next generation.Traditional activities
indicate the history and dignity of the nation,therefore
,those who are living immigrant lives should preserve their national habits,by doing this
they will have a chance to know where they come from and where they are related to
.It is the sense of belonging Change preposition
apply
hence
it is much more important than assimilating another culture
.For instance
,when the Chechens were exiled to Siberia,they lost their relatives but they found each other only with the help of their historical activities
,so they united again and came back to their homeland.
To conclude
,it is commonly believed that showing respect and following the country's tradition that you are living is a must,however
,it does not mean that this
idea is stronger than protecting national culture
because of what has been discussed above.Submitted by malikli.malik1995 on
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task response
Your essay generally addresses the given topic, but make sure to present balanced arguments for both sides and give a clear opinion at the end. Use connecting words to link your ideas and develop them fully.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure, but there is room to improve the development of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and use transition words and phrases to link your ideas.