Some people say that governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems to help people prevent illness and disease. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There have been growing efforts by the governments to improve

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’s health. Some

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may have claimed that reducing environmental pollution and solving ever-increasing housing

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will prevent

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and

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in

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.

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, personally, I disagree with

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suggestion because there are other factors that can cause

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and

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.

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,

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and

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are not affected by pollution and housing

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. In the past, not only air pollution and dirty water

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but

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lack of residences were worldwide prevalent

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.

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, now things have changed, allowing

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to have fresh water with filtration and providing many high-stories flats that can be easily accessible, because of the development of scientific and construction technology.

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, modern

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has gone through harsh diseases, I think

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is because there are unexpected disasters which have become burdens to the government. When COVID-19 swept the world world,

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, the government could not stop the spread of viruses.

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, even though the governments tried hard to reduce environmental

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, they couldn't help

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from preventing unexpected virus diseases.

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, there are other reasons that cause

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rather than environmental and housing

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.

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nowadays prefer to eat junk food which is awash with fat,

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of having healthy nutritious ingredients. Just imagine that hamburger,

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, its flavour is stimulated, feeling tastier than healthy food, resulting in influencing

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’s dietary habits negatively. What I am concerned about is that having unhealthy food makes

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struggle with

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.

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,

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are stressed a lot these days, due largely to heavy workloads, thereby having mental diseases like demotivation and depression. Most workers in Korea,

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, have complained about being required to do extra work in their workplace. I

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feel worried about it because

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can cause a dark atmosphere in

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in the future. For these reasons,

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and

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are derived from other factors in our

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. In conclusion,

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the governments have tried to solve environmental and housing

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to prevent

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from

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, they are wrestling with ongoing

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that cannot be solved. I firmly believe that they should focus on finding

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other methods to prevent and improve

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’s health.