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Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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We live in an age when many various
cultures
 are more likely to be almost the same and
this
 issue has been a controversial topic over the
last
 decade. In
this
 essay, I would like to provide an overview of different reasons and discuss that
this
 is really a negative tendency.
To begin
 with, it is generally acknowledged that as more and more people have a chance to travel to another country easily, they
also
 share their
cultures
 and languages. One clear example is that worldwide statistics demonstrate that over 2.3 billion people celebrate Christmas as one of the most important religious holidays even though some of them are not Christians.
Therefore
, it is acceptable to say that human beings in the world are extremely inclined to discover new traditions and
also
 empathize with foreign people to spread their own
cultures
. Apart from the reasons expressed above, I should
also
 make a point that
this
 resemblance has the potential to make
cultures
 of countries unimportant as it might be considered ubiquitous, and languages very common when a lot of humans engage in the same culture. Even worse, it might lead to the fact that there will be no reason to travel since countries are similar.
Furthermore
, another noticeable factor is that as tourist trade might suffer which can affect some countries dependent on that income, it may highly probably have a detrimental influence on governments' economy. In conclusion, it is reasonable to say that different aspects contribute to the similarities of
cultures
. Personally, I concur with the supporters of the view that
this
 negative increase can have a profound impact on governments economically.
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