The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.
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The maps display changes experienced by a university campus between 2010 and nowadays.
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, the lawn and seating area has been removed in order to expand other buildings,
such
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as
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facilities or
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accommodations. Currently, science and art buildings are separated by a road,
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in the past, both were grouped in the same building. Moving in a clockwise direction from the art building, it can be seen that two shops have been replaced by a higher
student
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building. Next to
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one, a road has been constructed,
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a restaurant has been demolished. At the corner of the two streets,
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accommodation has been changed by an enormous building where are located the
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facilities, shops and offices were placed in other locations in 2010. The
student
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accommodation that was located in
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area was moved across the road, next to another
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accommodation, increasing its height of it at the same time. In the centre of the map, an area for seating and the lawn were demolished, maintaining only the lake in the centre of the campus.
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, it is
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worth pointing out how all buildings are higher nowadays than previously in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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