A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? Explain your position.

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In modern times, It is probably true that

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is inevitable progress in education.

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but sometimes shows the worst results. In

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trend brings about both benefits and drawbacks. One of the main advantages of trying to be better than compansions is assistance to developing society and personnel.

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to say, The more competitive they are and the more they want to do well, the better their skills will improve.

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, in high school in South Korea, students are graded on the scale of their studies, owing to

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, children always compare their scale to peers and have a desire to grow than before.

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reason, they try to study harder.

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, if everyone in society were eager to beat someone

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would have a harmful effect on both individuals and the nation. If they learn only

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throughout the entire study period, it means they don't learn how to interact, care, and cooperate with others, and it will have a negative impact on their social life as adults.

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, they feel blue or have low self-esteem easily because of comparing to peers.

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, young people feel like they are not good enough because they are always focusing on what others are doing better. In conclusion, it is certain people benefit from competing with others.

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, from my perspective, the negative consequences are too significant to disregard.

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, it would be a good idea for the school to teach both

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and cooperation so that everyone could learn more balanced thoughts in life.

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Task Achievement

Try to more clearly state your opinion from the beginning of the essay. This helps to immediately guide reader's expectations.

Task Achievement

Ensure that your introduction aligns with the essay topic. It appears there was a misunderstanding about the prompt regarding factory establishment versus competition in education.

Coherence & Cohesion

Work on transitioning seamlessly between paragraphs and ideas. Using cohesive devices like 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' and 'On the other hand' can aid in this.

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Consider revisiting punctuation usage, especially the use of commas and periods. This assists in making your sentences clearer and aids in overall reading fluidity.

Task Achievement

Good use of examples to support your points, especially regarding the impact of competition in South Korea.

Coherence & Cohesion

The essay structure (introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion) is well adhered to, helping the overall organization of the content.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

274 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

local economy
economic activity
employment opportunities
infrastructure
environmental impact
ecosystems
traffic congestion
property values
industrial aesthetic
rejuvenate
quality of life
pollution
wildlife habitats
suppliers
contractors
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Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think, teachers do not need a training course. Discuss both views along with your opinion

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Write a letter to the publisher in a newspaper, asking to advertise a meeting of people from different countries you are organizing. Explain where, when and why

Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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