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In many contries, shopping onlines is replacing shopping at stores. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

#contries #onlines #stores
The majority of nations prefer online buying rather than shopping offline. E-commerce is convenient and
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. But there are drawbacks to be considered. On the
one
 hand, there are obvious benefits to online shopping.
One
 plus point is that we can purchase the items within less
time
.
For instance
. if we want to buy a dress
then
 we have to select the item which is needed
then
 by sitting at home, there will be no stress or tension of traffic astime-savingg.
Secondly
,
one
 more reason for shopping online is that it is more convenient.
For example
, we get a chance to look at various items, if we want to buy a shoe with variant brands
then
 they did not need to go to
the
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various
storess
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stores
storeys
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 can order every brand of
the
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shoe by sitting in
one
 place.
On the other hand
,
one
 problem is that we receive damaged items sometimes
due to
 which we have to wait for replacement and it takes more
time
 rather than buying directly from the store. Another possible issue is that online shopping takes
time
 to receive the products.
for example
 in case of buying any item for the wedding which is needed instantly
then
 we have to go directly to the store because online it takes delivery
time
. In conclusion,
while
 online shopping brings us benefits
such
 as convenience easy, it can
also
 affect product quality.
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