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In many parts of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a new born child while other works full time to earn money. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, a trend is going on that
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 parent has to live at their home in order to take care of their child despite going to work , which I think is a positive development for both
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 and their child and its advantages are more rather than its disadvantages.
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 with the advantages, first of all, in starting days of childhood, children do a lot of mistakes at their low maturity level , which can be dangerous for their life ,so
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 should always be with them to stop from doing mistakes and guide them to about their taking decisions. which they usually take before doing any work.
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, in 2020 in Punjab three old babies slipped into a water tank and got because no
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 was at home to talk care of them,
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, his
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 had to get disappointment.
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,
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person
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 plays a role of a supportive
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 who always creates fun in his life and helps in difficult time
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 he can feel alone which can cause mental disorder, so,
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 parent save children from these kinds of flaws. On the other side, it is commonly seen that in
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 era of inflation,
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 can not survive without money as far as
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 can not
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 afford the expenditure of others,
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 ,
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 step can create affect the income of a
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 .
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, children can be independent.
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 is because their
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 always take their decisions and they do give not them the to do work independently. To recapitulate,
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, money issues can be created for
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 I think the saving life of a child will cover all flaws.

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