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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
It is obvious that individuals are getting more tend to choose free online resources over
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printed ones.
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 statement in the following years there will be no more
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 readers, I think we will have still less amount of
people
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. There are many justifiable reasons why
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 of
people
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 as a primary informative media tool
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 increasing. First of all, it is easy and fast. When doing online research, everything is just only one click far away. It makes web-based services favourable and
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 over the other media providers.
Secondly
, thanks to the variety of websites, it can be reliable especially if it is compared to promoted ideologic media resources
such
 as newspapers or televisions. These news channels are commonly used as a
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propaganda
 weapon by the owner who has a specific idea or a
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 view. Thanks to the capability of comparing websites
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online,
people
 are not desperately deprived by only one filtered source of information.
Thirdly
, online searching gives comfort
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 to live
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 and minimal life.
For example
, I personally would not prefer to live in a home with a huge old-school library which
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 enormous free spaces just
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 books.
By contrast
, I still believe that there will be some
people
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 printed materials in the future. It can be understandable
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that individuals
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 who dislike to imposed
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clickbait news and mind-blurring images in online junk will be still
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 their old habits alive.
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light of
this
 information, it is irrefutable that sometimes searching online could be waste of time.
Also
, nowadays websites are pushing users to
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subscriber
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 after limited view
attemps
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attempts
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. Purchasing monthly
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subscriptions
subscription
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 surely could be
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 behaviour at
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. In conclusion,
although
 the odds are in favour of online users, from my perspective there will be still some loyal readers who wish to continue to buy printed resources in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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