The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The given bar graph provides information about the percentage of how many
times
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individuals
having
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convenience food at
restaurants
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in the USA in three different years (2003, 2006, and 2013).
Overall
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,
mostly
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most
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people
prefered
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prefer
to dine in
restaurants
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once a
week
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and once or two
times
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a month. A glance at the chart shows that the frequency of once a
week
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and 1-2
times
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a month registered a slightly similar pattern with 30%.
While
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in the following period, the
once a
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once-a-week
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week
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increased and
then
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decreased to 28% in 2013, once or twice a month decreased and showed an upward trend, becoming the highest
at the end
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of the survey.
On the other hand
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, it is vividly be seen that going
to
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too
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fast food
restaurants
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several
times
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a
week
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in the 3 years contributed between 20% and 15%,
however
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, the frequency in a few
times
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a year was 13%
initially
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and grew to 15%, maintaining the position in 2013. Looking more detail, never and every day eating at
restaurants
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were
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was
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merely just below 5%.
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