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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

#people #experimentation #animals #discoveries #experiments #alternatives
Nowadays, the protection of
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animals
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 been increasing with
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 laws and rights.
However
, the laboratories experiment with them for scientific purposes.
For
this
 reason, the question is simple: What could possibly be defensible in that? On the one hand, in order to make
human
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live
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 healthier and longer it is not required to kill speechless
animals
.
This lab
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animals
 are often raised for experimenting
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 drugs,
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 of medicine, and its symptoms.
Moreover
, if any experiment goes wrong
this
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animals
 die
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a painful and horrible death. In
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 Rights Protection Group in
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 every year total
10,000
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 guinea
pig
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pigs
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 are killed during
such
 tests.
On the other hand
,
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 developments done in medical science, first it has to be made sure
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 safe for use. As testing of
such
 is mandatory but
however
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 so directly on
human
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humans
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 or any animal is
also
 unethical. It is not that we need to stop experimenting
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 developments, we should look for an alternate solution like developing
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software which will provide us
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perfect human subject on
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 for testing.
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of
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such
 experiments linked to DNA, always go through a computer simulation. In conclusion, change
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 a necessary part of our life so in order to survive we need to keep on experimenting
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 things. But in doing so we must ensure no harm is done to any human or any animal.
This
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 technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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