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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the
future
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, there will be nobody purchasing physical newspapers or
books
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 because everything they want to read will be available on the Internet for free.
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 I agree that physical
books
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 will not be in demand in the
future
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, I disagree with the given reason for it. Obviously, not all digital
books
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 and newspapers will be free of charge in the
future
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.
This
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 is because for many organizations their revenue from electronic publications supports their entire operation.
For example
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, the New York Times charges a 1 dollar monthly subscription fee for their digital articles.
This
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 charge allows them to pay their employees and other operating costs. I believe
this
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 practice will continue in the
future
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 because
otherwise
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, they will go bankrupt. The real reason why people will stop buying paper
books
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 and newspapers, I think, is that they can get electronic editions in a matter of seconds. After a new title is published, one has to go to a bookstore to buy the print version or wait for it to be delivered. The electronic version, in comparison, can be readily available to read in just seconds.
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, to purchase a Kindle book, a person just needs to go to Amazon.com and click some buttons. The book will appear in their Kindle reader right away. In conclusion,
while
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 I believe nobody will buy print publications in the
future
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, I do not think
this
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 is because they will be able to read every piece of digital content they want free of cost for the above two reasons
mentioned
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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