Today's young generation is facing many problems in school and at home. What are the problems? What can parents do to help their teenage children?
Nowadays young
people
can get a lot of obstacles in their lives. They can have issues in both places where they study and at home. In this
essay, I am going to talk about these issues and how we can support teenagers.
To start with, the main sources of problems for offspring are school and the house. In each scenario, they may face different kinds of obstacles. In the study environment, where
they can be victims of harassment and bullying. Rephrase
apply
For example
, I had some trouble when studying with my classmates because they made fun of my family name. The situation made me uncomfortable and I could not study properly. In addition
, parents
can become a source of pain for teenagers when it comes to setting rules. An example of that is
when adults do not like giving freedom, kids usually feel punished and any good intention coming from the parent's decision will turn into an act against them. My mother and my father did not let me go to parties with my friends to develop my social skills, so I ended up being shy and isolated.
However
, there are a few actions that may help young adults to overcome those complications in both places. Grown-up people
should be more aware of young people
to assist them when being offended in public places. Especially, because older people
have gone through similar situations and can give advice on how to behave. On the other hand
, having assertive communication with parents
may improve the interaction with adolescents at home. Being able to listen and put ourselves in other shoes would help us understand their perspective. Talking with respect and considering each need would allow parents
and children to have a better relationship.
To conclude
, children can get some difficulties that they may encounter in school or at home. First,
the best way is to fix everything by talking with adults. Second,
parents
need to have more communication with their children to make sure they are safe and happy. I consider punishment is not always the answer. Communication is the key aspect.Submitted by Andrea Barreto on
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