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Many students now have the opportunity to study in other countries. Studying abroad may bring some benefits to some students, but it also ha a significant number of disadvantages. Discuss both sides of the arguments and give opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era,it is undoubtedly true that nowadays
number
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 of
pupils
 have the chance to
study
 in foreign countries
although
 some learners will get some advantages and drawbacks to studying in
different
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a different
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nation
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.
However
,
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate
reasons
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on reasons
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 for the same in upcoming paragraphs.Which will lead to a logical conclusion. There
are
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 adequate evidence of the view.Which are substantial the
top notch
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 reason is that studying in other societies
childrens
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children
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 will learn some different types of
study
 courses
as well as
 they can
also
 experience new technologies and learning systems in their curriculum.Adding more to it students can get
benefit
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the benefit
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of
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 a new culture and traditional
influenced
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.
Additionally
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 the
more
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benefit of studying overseas is that
pupils
 can get
a
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 benefit of living abroad independently as they can become more reliable and mature. Probing ahead,there are
also
 some disadvantages of studying abroad
such
 as
childrens
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children
children's
are
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suffering to pay their tuition fee
as well as
 they face more
difficult
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difficulty
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to find
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 work and low wages salaries.
Moreover
,as we all know studying abroad
are
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is
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 very expensive as not all individuals will afford to send their children abroad
for
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to
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study
.
Nevertheless
,a lot of
pupils
 are facing difficulties to find accommodation
in
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apply
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overseas
while
study
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studying
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.
Whislt
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Whilst
 some students are
also
 suffering for food and glossary
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for example
 some in the days of
study
pupils
 do not have much time to cook their food and some do not have money to buy their glossary for
live
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life
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.
To conclude
,
According to
 my opinion studying abroad is give students much experience of life and
also
give
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a
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them a
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better future
in
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apply
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overseas as after
study
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studying
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childrens
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children
 will get
a
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some
high rank
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high-rank
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 job.
However
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 guardians have to send their
childrens
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children
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 to
study
 overseas for
their
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apply
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better settlement.
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