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In today’s world, it’s private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Squabbling between private and
government
companies
 should invest in scientific search in today's aeon. Controversy exists as it whether it's advantageous in case private sectors take control of it. In
this
 monograph, I will weigh up the merits and demerits and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. First of all, the
government
had
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 a huge responsibility to tackle the environmental issue.
Therefore
, the
government
 gives less priority to allocating budget to
research
 fields. The private company gives liberty to scientists to conduct
research
 in different fields.
Furthermore
, they are ready to invest a huge budget until
finding
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 a cure for
this
 solution.
In addition
, private
companies
 even arrange meetings with other international expert scientists to get more clarity on the subject.Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
On the other hand
, private
companies
 capture a lot of animals from wild forest areas without permission from local authorities and conduct
research
 on them. Another factor to consider
,
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is a private company making disaster viruses and weapons and selling them to terrorism for their benefit.
For instance
,
covid
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the
 virus spread from the Chinese laboratory mistakenly.
As a result
, many souls are lost after being infected with the virus. Based on these points, the pitfall of the private sector is lucid. In recapitulation, there are more benefits to people in finding cures for diseases if private
companies
 invest in scientific
research
.
However
, the negative
consequence
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 cannot be ignored.
Government
 should take action against
companies
 who are involved in the
research
 without permission of the authorities.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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