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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Despite the progress made in agriculture, most individuals around the globe still experience starvation.
This
 essay will first discuss the reasons and will
further
 address what can be done about the problem.
To begin
 with, In some ,countries the amount of
food
 is very expensive.
This
 relates to farmers who increase the cost
due to
 buying fertilizers and effort output. They buy fertilizers to apply for the
food
 crops and
also
 where there is a weather condition like drought, they will have to go in search of water to irrigate the crops.
For example
, a BBC report from India showed that farmers who were interviewed voiced out that
due to
 some challenges
such
 as the purchase of fertilizers and work ,output the prices have to be increased.
Also
, In our contemporary world,some nations have poor roads and it takes a longer period for the foodstuff to get to the consumer. Some countries have bad roads in which
transportation
 of
food
 crops becomes difficult.
This
 in turn delays
food
 to get reach people.
This
 leads to a shortage of
food
 and
however
 makes individuals starve. Pertaining to
this
 in the former, the cost of
food
 prices should be decreased for individuals to afford to buy.
In addition
 to
this
, proper construction of roads to be laid so as to make
transportation
 of
food
 to consumers shortly. In conclusion , the high cost of
food
,
as well as
transportation
 challenges is the reason.
However
, when the prices are reduced and
transportation
 challenges are addressed many people will never go hungry
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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