Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations while others think it is waste of money. Discuss both veiws and give your opinion.

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In the modern world, it has been a trend to do grand celebrations of all
events
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, which is an ongoing debate
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that
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is it really worth
to spend
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spending
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money
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on all those
events
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. Some people say that it is necessary
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others disagree
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it. It is not a good idea to spend too much
money
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on family functions as far as my opinion is concerned. Talking about the proportion, who think it is valid to spend
money
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on
such
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events
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, their thinking criteria is based on status symbol, cultural norms and
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a sense
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of competition just by looking at others. These people believe in
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off that they have
tones
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tons
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of
moneyby
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money by
organising grand
events
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, in some cultures there are trends to spend way too much
money
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on all important
events
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, it does
not
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no
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matter whether they can afford it or not. They just do it for
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society
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pressure.
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, another factor comes
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peer pressure, because they even take loans just to celebrate their
events
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on large scale.
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, people who think
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their coat
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their cloth,
which
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apply
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means they spend
money
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wisely on any occasion. For them, organising family functions on large scale is a waste of resources like time and
money
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.
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, it is absurd to spend 10 years of savings on just one day.
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, in India, all the fathers spend all their savings on their daughter's wedding, it could be in terms of dowry or grand celebration, which is
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an absurdity
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absurdity
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.
To conclude
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, I would say, we should think about
our
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ourselves
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before we spend
money
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as
spendthrift
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spendthrifts
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cannot have certainty in future.
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