The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in a Australian city.

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The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects
rainwater
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to process in order to use as drinking
water
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.
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,
rainwater
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collected from houses can be used for drinking after it has been processed by being filtered and
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treated with chemicals.
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, the rain which falls on the rooftop is collected by the gutter and
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runs down the pipe at the side of the house into the drain at the bottom. Each house collects
rainwater
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in
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way and the
rainwater
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is
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passed along underground drains to the
water
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filter. The
rainwater
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passes through the
water
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filter to remove any impurities. Once it has been filtered, it continues along the pipes to a storage tank. From
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point, the
water
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goes from storage to
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water
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treatment. At
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stage of the process, the
water
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is treated with chemicals in order to make it fit for consumption. When the
water
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is ready for drinking, it travels along pipes that lead back into the houses in the town where people can use the
water
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for daily consumption.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water with synonyms.
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