Write about the following topic: More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent days, many
children
from a few developed nations are becoming obese
due to
their lifestyle and eating habits. In
this
, a topic I am going to explain how obesity causes serious effects on future generations.
Firstly
, wealthy countries do not have balanced work and personal lives.
This
reason mainly affects the
children
because of not spending time with
kids
continuously focussing on their jobs in
this
competitive world to earn targeted money. So that, the
kids
are easily exposed to televisions, mobile phones and video games etc
instead
of going to playgrounds and enjoying with friends.
On the other hand
, eating habits are
also
making
children
gain overweight.
For example
, in the hectic ,schedule parents don't get sufficient time to cook food and
moreover
, they will order pizzas and burgers for their
kids
which makes them easily addicted.
Secondly
, the environment plays a major role in future generations becoming obese like spoiling our nature by constructing shopping malls, institutes, IT technologies, and pharmaceutical industries
instead
of parks, and playgrounds.
For instance
, most dangerous substances like carbon will affect
kids
. The major problems for overweight
children
are early diabetes and some cholesterol-related risks which affect young generations in active participation in various games, and cultural activities and increase mental stress.
To conclude
this
topic, It is all about taking good care of their little one and providing healthy food and exercise by keeping in mind their stress, studies, physical activities and health and protecting the
kids
from various diseases that throw them back in
this
competitive world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • calorie intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional understanding
  • overfeeding
  • convenience over nutrition
  • electronic devices
  • dietary choices
  • self-esteem
  • medical expenditure
  • academic success
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