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The line chart provides information from 2008 research about the usage of six different energy in America during the period from 1980 to 2030. Generally speaking, most of the categories increased over the period
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 one item remained at a similar number.
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, it is obvious that petrol and oil were used the most between 1980 to 2030.
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 with, 35
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 of petrol and oil were used in 1980 and
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 dropped slightly to approximately 34
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 in 1995.
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, the consumption of petrol and oil was predicted to rise dramatically to nearly 50
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 in 2030.
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, in terms of coal and natural gas, there was a fluctuation between these two categories.
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 the consumption of coal and natural gas separately stood at approximately 16
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 and 20
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, they were projected to increase considerably to approximately 29
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 and roughly 25
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, respectively.
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nuclear, solar and wind and hydropower, these three categories grew steadily before 2008.
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, they were predicted to keep stable for the rest of the period.
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