The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
graph
and table present the
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monthly temperatures and the
number
of
hours
of sun
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registered per year in
London
, New
York
, and Sydney.
Overall
,
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the
graph
is shown that
the
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New
York
has the highest
number
of
hours
of sunshine in July.
While
,
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in the table is seen that
in
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New
York
has the biggest total annual
hours
of sun.
To begin
with, the
graph
illustrates the
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of
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the
hours
of sunshine in New
York
about 30
hours
, which is the biggest
number
in the
graph
through
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other cities.
By contrast
, the lowest
number
of
hours
of daylight in New
York
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January, 4 respectively. In
London
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the most daytime was in July, over 23
hours
, which is the same bright month as
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New
York
.
As well as
for New
York
,
London
has the least
number
of
hours
of daylight in January, above 5
hours
.
On the other hand
, in
Sydney
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the most sunshine period was in January, under 30
hours
, and the lowest
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in
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July, 15
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. The table
depict
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that
in
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New
York
has the greatest
number
of
hours
of
sun
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making up 2 535
hours
per year. The second city is Sydney with 2473
hours
and the lowest
number
has
London
, with 1180
hours
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, hours, london, york with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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