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Some people think that qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at universities or similar academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today, there is an ongoing debate about the qualities a person can learn at
universities
. some claim that these
universities
 are failing to teach individuals to become successful. I partially disagree with the above statement.
Firstly
, most
universities
 are focused on the academic curriculum.
Universities
 are failing in teaching a person to teach personal qualities as they are not a part of most of the university's educational plans.
Skills
 like communication, problem-solving, critical thinking and leadership
skills
 are playing a major role in
this
 modern society for an individual to excel in his career.
For example
, recent research by the Australian university of education revealed that
people
 with personal
skills
 have career progress compared to technically strong
people
 as the techs work under these
people
.
For example
, Sundar Pichayya who is the CEO of google has progressed to that position because of his personal
skills
 on top of his technical
skills
. On other hand, some
universities
 are trying to include personal development classes
along with
 the actual curriculum. By providing workshops and classes , they provide students with a chance to improve their qualities. Students
also
 have a chance to interact with many other
people
, present seminars etc which can help them in self-growth. Based on the brought up, some students are not willing to open up them self which is a great minus for their career.
To conclude
, I can say that
universities
 are not the only reason causes the current generation fails in attaining personal
skills
 but
also
 their own character.
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