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In some countries, girls and boys are educated in different schools rather than in the same school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, the participation of
students
, in any event, is increasing. It has been seen that many countries conducted classes for male and female
students
 in different
schools
 rather than the same school. In
this
 essay, I will explain its advantages and drawbacks.
Firstly
,from a religious perspective, people believe that it is better not to mix females and males in public events. In ,particular for Muslims, the belief mixing with
boys
 and
girls
 is completely prohibited and they follow their religion. By differentiating the school campuses they ensure their children have a safe environment for studying.As a result, free mixing is reducing and increasing many events
such
 as debating,sports, and presentations which are organized for males and females differently.Not only that the number of
girls
students
 in Bangladesh dramatically increased.
Furthermore
,teachers can make a plans
according to
 the institution's needs based on
boys
 or
girls
 as they are completely different by nature.
For example
, they can develop a system based on
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male of female
students
 and can focus on their personal growth and development.As the
schools
 are different, they can apply different strategies for
boys
 and
girls
.
On the other hand
, there is a number of drawbacks to participating in different
schools
. When it's different
schools
boys
 and
girls
 can not share their thought with each other, and
as a result
,
students
 tend to dominate one another.They differentiate each other and think as competitors
instead
 of making teams or friends.
Overall
,
boys
 and
girls
 grow up with different humanity and behaviour which is alarming for us.
To sum up
, there is a range of positive and negative impacts of differentiating
schools
 for
girls
 and
boys
.
However
, we have to focus on their development rather than differentiating
schools
.
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