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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting thier usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development ?

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The recent advancements in pharmaceutical technology and the increase in the number of pharmaceutical factories have led to increased production of
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 and the opening of many retail shops.
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, it is becoming common that when people see
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 problems, they buy and take
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, on their own, without consulting their doctors. Here in
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 essay, I will explain how and when
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 can be beneficial and harmful. The proportion of doctors to patients in many hospitals is very low. Usually, patients have to make an appointment at least three days before they see a
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 unless it is an emergency. Minor
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 problems
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 as flu and headaches have very clear symptoms and often their respective
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 can be easily found in commercial pharmacies.
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, there is no need reason to wait days before you see a
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 to receive the same medicine, so, buying
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 on your own can be reasonable on
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 occasions.
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,
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 doesn’t necessarily mean that people should find alternative
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 on their own for every
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 condition. Some serious
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 issues with severe symptoms need a rigorous diagnosis and taking medicine bought from commercial pharmacies can be counterproductive as it can worsen the case.
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, on
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 occasions, patients must see a
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 before they take any medicine.
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, I believe treating oneself with alternative
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 that aren’t ordered by a
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 can be both positive and negative, depending on the type and severity of the
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 problem. People might not need to wait days before they see a
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 for a simple and easily treatable disease, whilst, at the same time, they must visit a
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 when they have either an unknown disease or
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 issues with severe symptoms.
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