The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.
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This
table clearly presents and compares favourable pastimes in eight different countries. The pastimes, across the top of the table, are analyzed in relation to each country. As can be seen, about 60% of Canadians, Australians and Americans like watching television.
on the other hand
,
this
figure is quite low for China where only 15% of
people
watch television. Predictably, Americans like music at 23%,
whereas
only 2 to 5% of
people
in other countries feel the same way. 20% of
people
in England enjoy sleeping as a pastime
whereas
in Canada and the USA,
for example
, the figure is only 2%. Interestingly, the Chinese like hobbies the most at 50%, as opposed to only 20% in France. It isn't surprising that the highest percentage of beach lovers is in Australia and the USA at 30%. It seems that the pastimes of
people
of different nationalities may be influenced by a number of factors
such
as the socioeconomic situation or the climate. These factors influence cultural differences between different nationalities and make cross-cultural experiences more interesting.
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