In modern times, the issue of environmental Problems has become highly controversial. It is often said that it is the main reason for the loss of some species and animals however other feel that it has other big problems. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the argument and provide overall provide my Opinion.

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To start, in my opinion about these controversial problems, I think it is connected for many reasons like the air contamination by the companies and the plastics production by the factories are the first response but companies and the governments really do not care about our planet earth, they just are interesting to many money to have good ''economy'' but the environment is a problem who affects everyone including the animal who
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to communicate and those is the reason many species and animal are disappearing. The situation we need
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about is many of the population still bling with it
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die everyday
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of them are very sick but people do not worry about that
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because many of them think it is
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responsibility when many people who live in the big cities never select and separate the rubbish to the recycle in them
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or houses, another problem is people go to the shopping to spend buying unnecessaries things what they do not need at all and many of that shopping is using
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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