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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

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 the new trend, having multiple careers have become the new fashion. Having multiple sources of income and continuous learning throughout
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life is the new way of life. In my opinion, one should stay focused on a job
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, they can at times use their hobbies to earn some extra
money
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. Continuous learning remains the key to success. On the one hand, there are
people
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 who like to focus on a single job as they really love the work that they are doing.
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, they keep learning about
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new developments which
help
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 them to excel in their work.
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, software engineers are so passionate about coding that they do not wish to do anything else.
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, they keep upgrading their knowledge with
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new technologies, tools etc.
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 , they not only perform well at work but
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 get
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a promotion
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promotion
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 which increases their salaries and they can sustain their lifestyle. If they make
money
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 out of a hobby ,
if
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it
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 would be a very good way of relaxation what could
also
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 get them some
money
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.
On the other hand
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, there are a few
people
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 who are forced to do multiple jobs as
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inflation is extremely high these days.
People
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 are considering working at multiple places so that they can earn enough
money
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 to support their
family
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families
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 and give good education to their kids.
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, a person works at a factory during the day and drives cabs during the night. They keep learning new things so that they have more scope of
working
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.
This
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 might
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 lead to a lot of health issues.
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, as the saying goes jack of all
master
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masters
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 of none, we should concentrate on one thing and try to excel.
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,
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 the current
situation
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people
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 are forced to do multiple jobs to have a good life. In both
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cases ,
further
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 study plays an important role.
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