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Band 6.5

Write a letter to editor of the newspaper for claiming prize which they acknowledged. In your letter, you should say: • Details of how you won the prize • What the prize you are going to get • What actions you expect to be taken.

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Dear sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to would like to give to a reminder that I have not received the
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 which I won in a competition for reading books on your newspaper website. It is 2 months now that I have not had any information about my pize. I was a winner of your questioning quiz that I participated in the competition on Jun 15. After I completed all the questions, I was in the first position
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 all right answers.
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, I won the
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 which has a value of 1000 dollars, and you mentioned that my
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 would be to me in two to three weeks. Unfortunately, I have not received any information about what I won in 2 months now. I hope that you will contact me, and give me my
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 because my parents heard about me winning in your competition.
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, I would like to show them about
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. Yours sincerely, Tram Vu

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Consider revising the introduction to clarify your purpose in a more direct way. For example, you could state 'I am writing to remind you about my prize.'
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Proofread your letter for typographical errors, such as 'pize' instead of 'prize' and 'questioning quiz' should simply be 'quiz.'
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Try to clearly state your expectations for how the prize will be delivered or when you would like to receive an update.
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The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is quite appropriate for formal communication.
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You provided specific details about the competition date and the prize amount, which adds clarity to your request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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