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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Having the right
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 to choose from has become a significant issue in our society.
This
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 essay will analyse the benefits of
students
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 studying based on their interests,
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 illustrate the positive outcomes if
students
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 are only allowed to learn
science
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 and technology in the future. Some educators advocate that
students
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 should study whatever they like at university, which may help their lifelong career. By studying the subject they like, undergraduates are willing to learn by putting their effort into practice
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 of passive learning, which can be a driver for
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 to achieve in their workplace.
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, others are encouraged to study
science
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 and technology-related
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, as most of the job vacancies appear in those fields, which makes it easier for those undergraduates to find their design jobs. If college
students
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 can adapt and absorb the useful knowledge they were
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 in class, they are more likely to find a decent job with a competitive income when compared with their peers in class. From my perspective, university
students
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 should still major in some of the
subjects
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 they like in order to achieve their
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 results. Despite the fact that our world now has a blend and an emergence in an AI revolution, it is beneficial to learn
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 that are correlated with maths, engineering, and biotechnology, which are related to the
science
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 and technology areas.
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, by obtaining the required skills and knowledge, college
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 will have the ability to be involved in and work on international cooperation in later future. In conclusion, schools should guide
students
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 to learn
science
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 and technology courses and
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 provide courses that are designed to study for them to reach their potential.

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Make sure each paragraph clearly supports the main idea. Some ideas need more clear examples and explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear connectors between your ideas, like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to guide readers through your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly states the issue and your stance, which is a good start.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view of both sides of the argument, which shows understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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