There is a big number of people who wish to live in big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

It is widely
belived
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believed
that a
big
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number of people wish to live in big
cities
. In my opinion, I think there are
the
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advantages and disadvantages of living in big
cities
because of reasons and
relevant
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. On the one hand, the advantages are that citizens will have
exprience
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experience
experienced
a more modern life with many new and interesting things than country habitants.
Firstly
,
work
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the work
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environment in
cities
is more modern and active than
small
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in small
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province
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provinces
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. Labours in big
cities
can have many choice jobs and
workplace
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workplaces
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because
needs
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the needs
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of companies’s human
resource
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resources
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are various and continuos
everyday
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apply
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.
Secondly
, people living in big
cities
will
been
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be
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received
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provided
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comfortable
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with comfortable
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shopping, good
edutioncation
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education
and
heathcare
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healthcare
service
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services
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.
For instance
, there are many hospitals and
heathcare
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healthcare
centers with good doctors near living areas.
On the other hand
, there are disadvantages that aren’t as everyone
wish
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wishes
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.
The
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first,
cost
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the cost
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in big
cities
for anything is more expensive than in countries.
For example
, It is difficult to own a house or you have to save money about at least two
millions
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million
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Vietnam Dong to buy an old apartment 50 metres
.
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away.
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The second disadvantage, there are results from modern life.
Inlustrations
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Illustrations
to these are pollution of water, air and
noisy
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noise
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because there
are
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is
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traffic
jam
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jams
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by
crown
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the crown
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and resources of water and
electric
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electricity
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are overused. Especially, there
has
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is
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a disease called city disease named stress.
That is
because of
busy
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the busy
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and fast
livestyle
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lifestyle
.
For example
,
according to
a channel of Voice of Vietnam’s program, almost everybody in
cities
have
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has
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got
this
differently at soft or heavy level. In conclusion, it is commonly thought that living in big
cities
is a wish for a
big
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large
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number of
individials
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individuals
.
With
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my
upon
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opinion, I believe that living in big
cities
have
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has
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both
the
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apply
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advantages and disadvantages.
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