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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice.

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The below essay is going to explain my opinion of two groups of people some are thought self-employed is the best thing
while
 others thought working as an employee for a firm. Both
self-employment
 and being an employee for a
company
has
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 own it is advantages.
self-employment
 gives an opportunity to explore themselves. let's say you want to give it a try of software development but you are not sure how it fits you.
Then
self-employment
 is the best thing to do because you can
work
 as a freelancer. mostly freelancer jobs have no contract or agreement or any type of commitment. you
work
 for a considerable amount of time to understand whether it works for you or not.
In addition
 to that
self-employment
 has a few other pros
such
 as flexibility of working timings and days off, you have more control over taxation and what type of insurance you want to take
whereas
 in working for a firm, the
company
 will provide insurance for you.
on the other hand
, Working as an employee has too significant positives.
Firstly
, you will learn about
work
 culture. for ,
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working for a firm means you have colleagues and interaction is needed in
such
 a way that you will get to know how to
work
 in a team and how to behave in a group of people. working in a team greatly helps to learn
work
 culture.
Secondly
, you have the hierarchy of positions in a
company
 from CEO to end staff. you will have the motivation to climb positions in a
company
 to achieve something. In my ,opinion both it has own advantages, which one fits you completely depends on the individual and their choices in life.
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