Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and given your own opinion.

It is thought by some that
children
should be motivated to compete with each other, whilst others argue that those who are educated about cooperation become more beneficial citizens.
Although
,
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competition
helps youngsters excel in learning, I am of the opinion that cooperation is a more rewarding trait
instead
of
competition
and should be inculcated in every child. Those who state that
children
should develop
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of
competition
base their opinion on
this
analysis that by competing, boys and girls strive to learn more.
That is
to say that a good student, who generally gets first position in a class, will always try to maintain his position and will work harder so as to compete with his other fellow competitors. In
this
way, he will exert extra effort at home so that he is not beaten in the
competition
.
For example
, many parents in developing countries want their
children
to compete with others and get more marks so that their boy or girl gets admission to medical college where the margin of passing or failing is a fraction of a per cent.
However
, I believe that
this
trait of learning can be achieved more successfully if we teach our
children
to help each other. Even though there is a majority of those who favour
this
approach that
children
should be taught to compete to learn and become successful, I agree with others who advocate cooperation because
this
imbues a sense of sharing and teamwork in teenagers.
This
means that when students help each other
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their homework or assignments, all of them not only get knowledge but
also
develop the capabilities of assisting and contributing, which help them when they enter practical life.
For instance
, in Switzerland, many schools require their students to do group assignments, which practice has resulted in those students
also
helping their friends when they enter practical life. In conclusion,
while
the sense of
competition
is an important tool for learning, I believe that those
children
who are required to help each other, not only learn well but
also
become more productive youngsters.
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