What is altruism. Explain and use specif examples.

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According to
the lecture, altruism, a type of
behavior
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which
oppose
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selfishness, is not always only a matter of benevolence. In fact, the reading passages
points
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out how could be dangerous for an animal helps the group
making
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the sentinel. The lecture
is not agree
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about that because that specific animal with that role has more
chances
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to survive.
For instance
, when the predator is coming the
sentile
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senile
centile
sensible
being the first to see it can have the opportunity to escape immediately. At the same
time
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the sentinel has more possibilities to escape
also
because the group tries to defend
himself
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with the union but at the same time it can draw predator attention,
while
the sentinel alone can escape more easily.
Moreover
, even if some species, as the reading says, feel happy being altruistic, the lecture underlines that not everyone has
this
type of feeling.
Donate
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a kidney could be a selfless act, but maybe for someone
has
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no material reward back, it is
no
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not
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valuable
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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