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The table shows the information of total health expenditure per capita in five countries in 2019.

The table shows the information of total health expenditure per capita in five countries in 2019.
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The data illustrates how much money countries
such
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 as Australia, Germany, United States Japan and
UK
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the UK
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 spent
in
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 healthcare during the period 2019.
Overall
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, the United States is the country which spent more money on medical resources with a figure of 11.073
dollars
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,
whereas
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 the United Kingdom is the
the
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one that invested less
on
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in
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 it, with just 4.652
dollars
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 in 2019. The numbers reveal that there was a small amount of investment in the healthcare sector
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 in Japan with a figure of 4.823
dollars
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, followed by Australia with 5.187
dollars
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. If we compare the expenditure of Germany, it was just a moderate amount of 1.000
dollars
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 more than Australia. To summarize, the data shows a lack of investment in health resources and attention in the
europen
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European
 countries,
however
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 the same occurred in Asia and Oceania.
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, the highest health spending
it
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is
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seen
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 in the United States which is a country where the government does not expend much money
in
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 public health.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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