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manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

#process #sugar #cane
The steps involved in the production of
sugar
 using
sugar
 cane are illustrated in the diagram.
Overall
, there are 7 main steps which
takes
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 over a year through it
sugar
canes
 are harvested and crushed to make
juice
 and after some process
such
 as purifying, heating, centrifuging, drying and cooling on it, we can obtain
sugar
.
Firstly
,
sugar
canes
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cane
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 should be grown
about
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 a year to a year and
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a
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half to be prepared to harvest. The function of cutting
canes
 is done in two ways: one is manually and the other is through the use of machines.
Then
,
sugar
canes
 are crushed using a
machin
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machine
 with gears to obtain
juice
 from them. The process continues when we use a limestone filter to purify the
juice
.
At
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 the fifth step,
pured
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pure
juice
 is heated to make syrup through the use of an evaporator. In the following step,
sugar
 crystals are
seperated
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separated
 from syrup by means of
centrifuge
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.
Finally
,
this
 sweet product is prepared by drying
sugar
 crystals
as well as
 cooling them after that.
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