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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to solve this problem?

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there are several perspectives to solve
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 ,especially in huge cities. some
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 have
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 viewpoint that the government must develop public transportation
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 as the train and subway lines.
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, other groups think if the state increases the figure of bigger
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 will be able to decline traffics. on the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that the union must rise the statistic of train and subway lines. from
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 the price of
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 model of transportation needs to be a significant budget, most
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 will be willing to use
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 transportation so the amount of
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 reduces.
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, the schedule of
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 type of transfer is often on time so the satisfaction of passengers grew rapidly and the consumption of private vehicles declined over a long period.
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, many commentators justifiably argue that there are advantages to developing
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. there are some
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 that have to use private transport, for ,example family in early childhood, older
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, or when the weather is crazy.
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 of the government
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 a negative attitude toward developing
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, there will have several problems in the city.
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 from an industrial viewpoint,viewpoints the number of cars in every country is increasing every day. in conclusion, both sides of view have several merits that need to reduce
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 jams.
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, we cannot eliminate each opinion. so if we want to control
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 especially in the inner city or in the future, we must build wide
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 and rise the number of subway lines and trains.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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