Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Museums and

art

galleries

are divided into two groups, which ask guests money to

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and those that are completely free. I think charging entrance

fees

are more acceptable than free ones as it seems

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more benefits rather than drawbacks. One and foremost, it is a necessity for

art

galleries

and historical places to meet financial needs because maintaining a building has primary costs

such

as utility bills, staff payments, safety and security and

such

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, so charging a resealable fee for

this

place means there will be no concern for basic expenses.

Moreover

, admission

fees

help cultural places expand rapidly

thus

they provide more places and hold extra exhibitions to absorb more audiences

also

it is a great deal for

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the tourists’

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tourists’

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industry

consequently

lots of

tourist

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tourists

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are interested in visiting museums and

art

galleries

when they travel to a country. Madame Tussaud museum,

for example

, has various branches around the world,

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only

attracts

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more visitors

,

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but

also

is so popular.

However

, the entrance

fees

could have some drawbacks

specially

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for people who could not afford to buy tickets

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loss

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their interest

to

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visiting

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, as a result,

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as a result

society may lose local cultural attention and probably prevents local cultural growth among people. In conclusion,

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charge

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charging

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admission

fees

may have some downsides, but I find it totally valuable for a country so

benefits

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the benefits

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outweigh its drawbacks, because not only covers primary needs

,

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but

also

in terms of expanding

galleries

and attracting more travellers, tourist industry could make a huge profit from it.